WHAT DO YOU THINK OF MY COLLEGE ESSAY, IS IT READY TO BE SENT TO COLLEGES?

If this is a serious essay, then it is one of the most obnoxious things I've ever read. You blame others for your failure and its likely this trait would carry over into college. Rewrite it. Like the entire thing. In fact, you should pick a completely different topic to write your essay about. Also, what is the purpose of this essay? By reading it, all I learned is that you blame others for your failure. If you were supposed to address a question (like your goals in life or why you want to go to college), your essay doesn't give an answer.